tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post9064572023382831371..comments2023-06-01T07:00:31.254-05:00Comments on This is Not Hitchhiker's Guide: Moneydontpanic2011http://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-14885178640263783392012-10-08T12:03:39.677-05:002012-10-08T12:03:39.677-05:00I'm not sure what the women are being held for...I'm not sure what the women are being held for other than they didn't fulfill their contracts. I do like that the implication is something sinister at least for this scene. I'll have to consider and clarify what they are actually doing elsewhere in the story because that's not really what's going on. Thanks for the input!dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-71137513777572605722012-10-08T11:17:57.472-05:002012-10-08T11:17:57.472-05:00I LIKE IT:~) Go with it. You had me from the begin...I LIKE IT:~) Go with it. You had me from the beginning to the end. I want to know more. I loved this line, "She shook her head as he dug at her secret." <br /><br />I too preferred the idea of the women being used for something other than sex, which is only implied by your line about his wife...Otherwise, I would have figured they were workers or something else. But that's easy to fix...the idea of this story is a good one and I recommend going for it:~)Sarahttp://www.sarahealy.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-77840585514070880992012-10-07T23:13:34.153-05:002012-10-07T23:13:34.153-05:00Ooo. More good ideas! Thanks for the feedback an...Ooo. More good ideas! Thanks for the feedback and suggestions.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-19952866823144481492012-10-06T13:36:58.170-05:002012-10-06T13:36:58.170-05:00This was a fun read. It was also hard to read emot...This was a fun read. It was also hard to read emotionally because she knows that she has lost the game before it even really began. I too agree with the currency and in addition to the gold option is something along the lines of canned food, both valuable for the food and can itself, or fuel of some kind, power, batteries maybe. I for some reason didn't jump to the women as sex slaves but rather as experiments, that he had them for some other far more sinister reason. Run with it! Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-55116534780693187292012-10-05T20:17:51.185-05:002012-10-05T20:17:51.185-05:00That sucks, doesn't it, to know you're bei...That sucks, doesn't it, to know you're being manipulated and not being able to do anything about it.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-60468601545212164452012-10-05T20:17:25.363-05:002012-10-05T20:17:25.363-05:00Thanks! He is a creep, isn't he? Or at least...Thanks! He is a creep, isn't he? Or at least he gives that impression at the moment.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-9895049799150022252012-10-05T20:16:51.790-05:002012-10-05T20:16:51.790-05:00Yeah - he certainly gives that impression, doesn&#...Yeah - he certainly gives that impression, doesn't he? Then again, historically speaking indentured servitude tends to go in that direction.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-73805441482594228732012-10-05T20:16:10.082-05:002012-10-05T20:16:10.082-05:00I'm not sure. I have a concept for the story ...I'm not sure. I have a concept for the story but not so much for characters. I'm wondering if I can figure them out before NaNo or if this idea will have to wait for a bit.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-23395496227937840072012-10-05T20:14:31.671-05:002012-10-05T20:14:31.671-05:00I think I will eventually explore this more even i...I think I will eventually explore this more even if I don't get to it for NaNo this fall.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-85874094656337993732012-10-05T20:13:47.782-05:002012-10-05T20:13:47.782-05:00I was thinking something like gold. It can't ...I was thinking something like gold. It can't be medicine unless I rearrange why she needs the currency to begin with - which is a possibility...dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-77390563173492299382012-10-05T16:50:45.036-05:002012-10-05T16:50:45.036-05:00That was great. Made me really feel for the woman ...That was great. Made me really feel for the woman and how she knew she was being manipulated.Patricia JLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582005500429122486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-62474951718486753352012-10-05T16:22:25.270-05:002012-10-05T16:22:25.270-05:00Go for gold - that's always a good one, or sin...Go for gold - that's always a good one, or since you have a medicine slant here, have THAT be your currency (might be a personal bias on my part lol)<br />:)Kalamapelehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00882872478136709313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-69686403676525124322012-10-05T15:04:18.946-05:002012-10-05T15:04:18.946-05:00I like it!! The dialogue was really great. In that...I like it!! The dialogue was really great. In that short amount of words you definitely established the characters enough that I'm rooting for her to succeed and not be stuck with the creepy guy!Staceyhttp://www.staceysmotheringmoments.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-33425802092095578482012-10-05T14:15:00.394-05:002012-10-05T14:15:00.394-05:00Interesting...I wonder if ANY of the women had a c...Interesting...I wonder if ANY of the women had a chance in hell of accomplishing whatever task he sets them. I wonder if it might be a trap...Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-56141901410813536732012-10-05T12:33:46.509-05:002012-10-05T12:33:46.509-05:00ooo... definitely intriguing. moral crisis + ponte...ooo... definitely intriguing. moral crisis + pontential sex slaves = a great read.<br /><br />I wonder what other aspects of character your female lead may have? Will she had her own flaws that she brings to the table, or will she always be so virtuous? <br /><br />:)<br /><br />barbara @ de rebushttp://www.barbaragildea.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-18012084958270029632012-10-05T11:39:23.818-05:002012-10-05T11:39:23.818-05:00Hmmm...there is a lot of story in this. You could ...Hmmm...there is a lot of story in this. You could go in a lot of different directions. I would like to see more!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-27719896058185992792012-10-05T10:29:44.833-05:002012-10-05T10:29:44.833-05:00Good point about the money. I'll go back and ...Good point about the money. I'll go back and look at that. Thanks for the feedback!dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-60580067285081173262012-10-05T10:28:25.667-05:002012-10-05T10:28:25.667-05:00Hmmm...that may have to work in there somewhere. ...Hmmm...that may have to work in there somewhere. Thanks for the idea.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-52654402754881529572012-10-05T09:50:32.536-05:002012-10-05T09:50:32.536-05:00I really liked the concept you have here! If you ...I really liked the concept you have here! If you are looking at a future setting, I would suggest that you might want to find something to use as a hard currency instead of money. Mostly because paper money typically requires a stable and unified government.<br /><br />I think the story definitely has potential - it's already a compelling concept! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05112972195028944426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-29718902401420362452012-10-05T09:13:07.359-05:002012-10-05T09:13:07.359-05:00I think it's an interesting motivation and one...I think it's an interesting motivation and one that many people can relate to. Fourteen women on a compound? He better be careful. That's a revolution waiting to happen.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-31147390854348968592012-10-05T09:11:43.523-05:002012-10-05T09:11:43.523-05:00Thank you. The idea that this could happen in the...Thank you. The idea that this could happen in the near future is exactly what I was looking for.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-45150091013672645362012-10-05T08:55:16.146-05:002012-10-05T08:55:16.146-05:00Yeah, I like how you kept this on a reaslistic, pe...Yeah, I like how you kept this on a reaslistic, personal level. This is so relatable. Your dialogue was great.Lancehttp://lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-37221837999105113082012-10-05T08:34:05.302-05:002012-10-05T08:34:05.302-05:00Thanks. I'm still playing with the idea and a...Thanks. I'm still playing with the idea and am not sure that the sick sister is the motivation I want, but it works for now.dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5362433707008186716.post-20202018505803647392012-10-05T07:57:24.753-05:002012-10-05T07:57:24.753-05:00Oooh! Intriguing. Using oneself as currency.
It&#...Oooh! Intriguing. Using oneself as currency.<br /><br />It's interesting to see how many people used this prompt in regard to healthcare. <br /><br />Really well written. Nice to meet you, Wisper.<br /><br />And thanks for bopping by my place. Renee Schuls-Jacobsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10987735882275763051noreply@blogger.com