Wednesday, January 15, 2014

A Prayer

Sorry I missed a few weeks.  Things got rather nuts.  Anyway, here's this weeks Trifecta Challenge:

We are asking for a 33-word response to the following snippet:
The first time I saw. . .


 Here's the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each.  We're going low-brow on your this week.  Or not.  Can you class it up under these restrictions?  Give us your best.

To clarify, we are giving you 5 words.  We want another 33 from you, for a grand total of 38.


Here's my response:
The first time I saw you I loved you.
Your soul pulled me in.
I was drawn to you like a moth to a flame.
I gave you my heart.
Please don’t let it burn.  I beg you.

Be sure to click on Trifecta here or above to see other amazing responses to this prompt!


12 comments:

  1. The begging. That's always the killer!

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    1. It gets me, too! Thanks for stopping by.

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  2. Such a vulnerable place to be, taking a chance by loving.

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    1. I can't think of much that is as vulnerable as taking the chance to love. Thanks for reading!

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  3. There is a real power imbalance in your piece that puts the narrator in a very vulnerable position. I hope that the "begging" doesn't cause her to choose the wrong partner. It is a real gamble to give up your personal power so. Trust is profoundly important in this situation. Hope it all works out for the best in the end. Good post. Any time our writing draws forth an emotional reaction, I feel we have done our job, as writers, well. That you have done. :)

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    1. Thank you. Your words are humbling to me.

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    1. Probably one of the biggest risks we can take.

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  5. The trust that is implied here is a beautiful thing.

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