Thursday, September 19, 2013

In Between

Write at the Merge gave us a photo and a Sylvia Plath quote this week.  The link will take you to the details of the prompt and other great responses.  Please be a little kind in any concrit.  I don't write much poetry anymore.


It’s the breath
     Before the first lightning strike
     In the coming storm

It’s the moment
     When Summer flies
     But Fall has not yet come

It’s the time
     When the sun has slipped away
     But darkness tarries

It’s the pause
     Before the plunge
     Into the unknown


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11 comments:

  1. AnonymousSeptember 19, 2013 at 10:43 PM

    This is good. You should keep writing poetry. :-)

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 20, 2013 at 10:35 AM

    I think you did well with the poem. It captures that hesitation between seasons, and I like the repetition of "It's the...".

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    1. dontpanic2011September 21, 2013 at 9:16 PM

      Thanks! That repetition, to me, seemed to be the key to tie each stanza together well.

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  3. Sara HealySeptember 20, 2013 at 11:05 AM

    Don't worry about me being "kind," because I loved this poem. I read it out loud and it just sang to me. It's also a wonderful use of the prompt. My favorite verse was this one:

    It’s the time
    When the sun has slipped away
    But darkness tarries

    I'm not a morning person and so I've experienced this in-between moment many times.

    Well done. Write your poetry:~)

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    1. dontpanic2011September 21, 2013 at 9:17 PM

      Thank you. I am so happy you connected with this and enjoyed it.

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  4. Shelton Keys DunningSeptember 20, 2013 at 11:57 AM

    You don't need to plead, ever. Your talent is solid and your voice is strong.

    Yes even in poetry. And you nailed this.

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    1. dontpanic2011September 21, 2013 at 9:19 PM

      Thank you. I appreciate the compliment, especially when it comes from such a talented writer.

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  5. KirSeptember 20, 2013 at 2:31 PM

    ahh, the pause before the plunge..
    that line is beautiful and telling. loved it.

    Don't we all live for that moment of in between? That place of simply "being"? Wow, you captured it. :)


    I think your poetry is wonderful,keep writing.

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    1. dontpanic2011September 21, 2013 at 9:21 PM

      Thank you. I love that you connected to what I was aiming at - that moment of transition where it isn't one or the other anymore but a unique place in between.

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  6. KirSeptember 25, 2013 at 2:50 PM

    I love that space, I truly do. That place where you are not one or the other, but anything is POSSIBLE.

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