Saturday, December 7, 2013

Love and Loss

The Trifextra Weekend prompt was to use the words basin, dazzle and myopic in a piece totaling 33 words.  This is somewhat reflective of some things I've been dealing with at work with several kids.  Concrit is always welcome.  Be sure to follow the link above to see what others have done with this prompt.

A basin
Overflowing with
Hopelessness
Creates a myopic view
Of the Future

Then
Coming into focus
Desire
Lust
A hope
To dazzle and blind

A new myopic view
Blends together
Love and loss


16 comments:

  1. Cool poem...liked how you did this prompt!

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  2. The movement from despair to hope is so perfect. Loved this!

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  3. This is brilliant. At first, I couldn't believe it was only 33 words. :)

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  4. I like the feeling of zooming in and out here, like a telescope. The idea of moving in and out of myopia - focusing on different things, but never getting the wide perspective - that's really interesting. Nice job.

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    1. Each has its own way of blurring things, don't they?

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  5. I like how both hope and hopelessness can become myopic. Great job!

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  6. I like the sadness of the idea of a new myopic view. That feels very real to me. Thanks for linking up.

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  7. Beautiful poem :) There was so much said in just a few words. Loved it!

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  8. Love that first stanza. It is hard to get that view right, isn't it?

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    1. I wonder if we ever do get it right. Thanks!

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