A basin
Overflowing with
Hopelessness
Creates a myopic view
Of the Future
Then
Coming into focus
Desire
Lust
A hope
To dazzle and blind
A new myopic view
Blends together
Love and loss
Saturday, December 7, 2013
Love and Loss
The Trifextra Weekend prompt was to use the words basin, dazzle and myopic in a piece totaling 33 words. This is somewhat reflective of some things I've been dealing with at work with several kids. Concrit is always welcome. Be sure to follow the link above to see what others have done with this prompt.
A basin
A basin
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Cool poem...liked how you did this prompt!
ReplyDeleteThe movement from despair to hope is so perfect. Loved this!
ReplyDeleteThis is brilliant. At first, I couldn't believe it was only 33 words. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI like the feeling of zooming in and out here, like a telescope. The idea of moving in and out of myopia - focusing on different things, but never getting the wide perspective - that's really interesting. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteEach has its own way of blurring things, don't they?
DeleteI like how both hope and hopelessness can become myopic. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteI like the sadness of the idea of a new myopic view. That feels very real to me. Thanks for linking up.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem :) There was so much said in just a few words. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteLove that first stanza. It is hard to get that view right, isn't it?
ReplyDeleteI wonder if we ever do get it right. Thanks!
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