Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Wishful Thinking

Okay, so this is not exactly a Valentine's Day piece - but Trifecta asked for a 33 word piece about love gone wrong.  We had to avoid using the words love, sad, tears, wept, heart, or pain.  Here's my response.  Concrit, what there is to offer in a 33 word piece, is always welcome.


Blood, spraying everywhere.  The knife held in a white-knuckle grip.  His body cooling on the floor.

“You’re not going to cheat on me again.”

She shook her head, clearing her mind of daydreams.



Be sure to check out the other responses - they're short and quick!

15 comments:

  1. Hahaha Love it. Especially his body cooling on the floor.

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  2. Oh clever. Like this. Thanks for linking up and don't forget to vote!

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  3. Hmm...interesting, gory, and well done. Love about to go very terribly wrong, I think.

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    1. It has certainly started to go wrong and is not heading in a good direction, that's for sure!

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  4. Haha... you weren't kidding - this isn't Valentine's Day at all :) I guess death is one way to encourage faithfulness!

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    1. Nope - not a good Valentine's Day. Death would definitely be one way to prevent someone from cheating. At least not more than once.

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  5. No one can say love isn't...passionate!

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    1. It certainly is. Look at how many love gone wrong murders there are every year!

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    1. Just a little. At least it is with this much detail to that fantasy.

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  7. If those are her daydreams, what do her nightmares look like? Eek! Great job.

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