The Add On

Trifextra's challenge this week was to take an earlier 33 word Trifextra response and add another 33 words.  Here's my first response:

“Please.  Just one beer,” he begged at the door.

“Nope.  Not allowed,” the bouncer replied.

He rode away, wobbling to and fro.

Front tire turned.

A sudden stop.

Up and over he went.

Here's the additional 33 words:

Upon the curb he sat

World spinning ‘round

Scratching his bleeding head

“What just happened?”

Bleary eyes failed to see

The crimson stream.

Struggled to his feet

Whomp, whomp, whomp

Bumpy ride home.

Any concrit is welcome!

Bars

Wow.  For some reason I've been terribly disorganized this weekend.  I had this pretty well set for the Trifextra writing challenge and didn't get it posted in time.  But, I thought I'd share it anyways.  Here was the challenge:

On to Trifextra, where this weekend we're borrowing from the musical world.  Noted blues musician, Lead Belly, was quoted in Three Uses of the Knife by David Mamet as saying:

You take a knife, you use it to cut the bread, so you'll have strength to work; you use it to shave, so you'll look nice for your lover; on discovering her with another, you use it to cut out her lying heart.

He uses one object, a knife, to flesh out a character and to tell a story in a basic three-part dramatic structure.  We want the same from you.  Give us 33 words (exactly) that tell us three different uses for one object.  But don't just tell us that a can opener can be used to 1) open cans, 2) open beer bottles and 3) break a window in case of a fire.  Tell us a story, like Lead Belly did, if you can.  It won't be easy, but you guys are far beyond needing easy prompts.

Here was my take on that prompt:

“Please.  Just one beer,” he begged at the door.

“Nope.  Not allowed,” the bouncer replied.

He rode away, wobbling to and fro.

Front tire turned.

A sudden stop.

Up and over he went.

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The Don't Panic Picture Prompt is up!  Link up will start on Tuesday August 14th!