Thursday, January 23, 2014


I combined two prompts this week.  Studio 30+ gave us the words planet and loathe.  Write at the Merge gave us this quote

“Sometimes legends make reality, and become more useful than the facts.”

~ Salman Rushdie

and this picture
Image courtesy of Unsplash.
Image courtesy of Unsplash.

Here is my response:

“You mean I can do all of this with my mind here?”

“Yes.  This planet creates what you imagine.  It will keep filling up empty space until none is left.”

“What happens then?”

“Then it resets.  Starts over.  But you need to be careful here.”


“Because you can interact with your creations.  You are not simply an outside observer.  When you start exploring what you created, you are bound to continue until you reach the end of your creation.”

“Why is that so bad?”

“Come with me.”

I followed him down a path in between two separate worlds.  My utility suit felt a little sticky and, in all honesty, I was itching to create a nice beach where I could take it off and relax in the warm sun.

We stopped in front of a third world.  It was tenement complex bigger than any I had ever seen back on Old Earth.  Lights were on in the windows.  I even thought I could smell a variety of dinners wafting their aromas down alleys and across the empty boundary line to my scent deprived nose.

“I still don’t get it.”

“Where does this end?  Do you see it?  How many apartments do you think are in this world?  How many scenes to play out in each apartment?”

“I don’t know for sure, but from what I can see there’d be a lot of apartments to check out.”

“Too many.  The student who built this world detested authority.  He wouldn’t accept my rules and expectations for him no matter how hard I tried.”

“I would loathe it too, if I didn’t know how much was at stake with this project.”

“He’d forgotten that.  He was stuck in the creation, figuratively.  Now he is literally.”

I turned to my trainer, my jaw dangling in the fictitious breeze.

“Yes.  That is correct,” my trainer interpreted the look on my face, “He is stuck in there until he has explored every tenement building, every apartment, every scene.  That is the one rule here.  You must finish what you start.”

No wonder my trainer was a legend.  He’d been out here for fifteen years training in new graduates where the passing rate was only about twenty five percent and the consequence for failure was all too often death.

For the first time I really understood what I was facing.  And I was terrified.

Any concrit you have is most welcome.  Be sure to click on the images below to see other great responses to these two prompts.



  1. You have some great dialogue going this a story you have continued. I was seeking some detail about the characters...and looking for the action between the dialogue. This felt like a piece pulled from somewhere, so I am sure with that I would have a better grasp. I love the creativity of the storyline and setting...a fascinating idea!

    1. Thanks! It is actually totally off the top of my head and a completely unconnected piece. I am thinking I will have to come back and revisit this one, though. It was fun to write.

    2. I realized I commented from another account above...I am Writerly Wanna Be on the link up.

    3. Thank you for letting me know that. I always try to make sure I get back to read at least what people who have commented on my posts wrote. I aim for more than that, but considering how busy I get at times, I want to at least make that.

  2. A short piece that makes me want more....

  3. First of all, thanks for coming to play with the S30P gang! The more, the merrier, right?

    I have to agree with the first comment. It feels like we were dropped into the middle of something. That's not necessarily a bad thing, though. It means the the little bit we get to see of the story, and hear of its characters, feels *fully-developed* as it were. I would like to read more about this universe and these characters!

    1. Thank you! I really try to practice the "show-don't-tell" idea. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't. I will certainly have to keep this one in mind to come back and play with some more!

  4. I'm with Terry. The dialogue was strong, but I wanted a little more physical context. Action, environment. The concept was interesting, though. The idea of the danger of playing god, and the stakes were nice and high by the end.

    1. I will definitely add this one to my list of prompts to come back and explore more! Thank you!

  5. There's a fun sense of possibility here, and I like how the lightheartedness of the piece (ex. thinking about creating a beach on which to relax) tapers into the understanding that something serious is happening.

  6. I actually loved the feeling of being dropped in the middle of something. Kind of like how your main character must have felt like... Thanks for linking up with our prompts! Hope to see you again.

    1. Thank you! I loved working with this prompt. I will certainly be back again!